My first fic posting!

[amezri]

I answered Khaki's fic challenge on the wrbeta list. I've never posted a ficlet there before ^_^ Can't wait for feedback!

Oh please let there not be flames...


Title: Opening Sentence Challenge: I See Red
Author: Amezri
E-mail: mizudax@yahoo.com
Rating: PG
Archive: WRFA, whoever wants it, just let me know
Series: None.
Synopsis: My answer to Khaki's Opening Sentence Challenge, "They died instantly."
Feedback: I luuuuurve some feedback! ^_^
Author's Note: This is my first fic posting to the list. Be nice, but be truthful :)

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They died instantly. There was red fluid everywhere and bodies squirmed on the floor. A lone figure stood among the rubble. Growling, he bent down and helped the girl to her feet. "You hurt?"

"I'm fine," she hissed, waving him off. She picked a red chunk out of her brown hair. "I can't believe this."

"It ain't your fault, darlin'." The man surveyed the damage around him. "What a mess. Scooter's gonna have a hissy fit."

"'Mess'? Mess?! This is way more than a mess, Logan! It's a disaster!" Rogue growled and stared at the small bodies scattered on the ground. Some of them were beginning to sit up and wipe the grime from their faces.

"It's not really your fault, you know. Hank--"

Rogue grabbed some towels. "I'm the one who left Hank alone in here. Hank. Baby Hank!"

Logan bent down and lifted a tiny version of Storm on to the counter. There had been an accident in the lab and four of the main team members were changed into tiny tots. "Remy, put that down!" the Wolverine growled at the mini Cajun.

Still on the kitchen floor, little Betsy giggled and threw a chunk of red goo at baby Hank. Hank growled and threw a larger glob back, hitting her square in the face. Wanting to join the fun, Remy charged a piece and flung it towards the other two. It exploded a split second later, adding more red to the walls.

Rogue screamed in frustration.

Jubilation Lee rounded the corner and narrowly escaped the flying goop. She poked her head cautiously into the kitchen. "Um, hey guys. The Professor and Jean think they've got that thingamabober fixed. Uh.. who set off the Jell-O bomb?"

Rogue and Logan answered simultaneously: "Hank."

Comments

[julietlaw.livejournal.com]

Dear Amez,

That's a really nice ficlet you wrote here. And an original idea you get there. Pretty funny too.
You have a great style and you should probably wrote more often. Or actually post more often because I read somewhere on your LJ that you've writen fic in greek so nobody can read them. ;)
Anyway, I liked it.

Juliet

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[amezri.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Juliet! Glad you liked it ^_^ Though, I think the only steady amount of writing I do will be at the RP. ;)